Friday, 21 September 2012

Five Sentence Fiction: Zombie


Though the virus rampaged, everything was scarce, and people were dying left, right and centre, it didn’t mean she had to give up on her dreams and he was her dream. 
He filled her stomach with butterflies so flustered she could barely see straight, let alone aim true, and when he leaned close to reposition her bow she was intoxicated by his nearness, and her hands would shake more than the chaotic winged creatures inhabiting her belly, but his patience and his protection guaranteed her arrow had already scored bullseye. 
They darted through alleys but the undead surged and he let loose a string of arrows and yelped as necrotic fingers tore at his leg; she grabbed and wrenched him free and they ran until out of reach then she glanced at him, watching beads of sweat leave dirty trails, and he winced as he rubbed his wound.
Their hearts beat almost in unison and his forehead knotted, and he began to beat his fist against the wall…his eyes darkened and red veins rose and began to bloom purple, and his heartbeat faltered; that was when she knew, but she wasn’t giving up and she ignored the dragons breathing fire in her belly, and leaned towards him for a kiss. She hadn’t expected the passion to burn with such violence as his kiss, their first and last, smouldered and blood began to pour from her lip…but maybe, just maybe it was better this way…and she hadn’t given up on her dream… 



21 comments:

  1. Wow, love this, great descriptions as always, so visual and emotional :)

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  2. Gory and gruesome - I really don't do horror but the romance - wow - "chaotic winged creatures inhabiting her belly" is such a great phrase!
    First and last kiss - sooooo sad! :-(
    Great work Lisa.

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  3. "... and blood began to pour from her lip" - wonderful!

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  4. "necrotic fingers" what a great phrase. Loved this!

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  5. Wow! This packs quite a punch! Intense!
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  6. This one really swept me away. You captured so beautifully the intoxication that is passion and the lengths we will go to satisfy it. Awesome job!

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  7. Laura and Ann, much appreciation for your thoughts; Jayne, it's amazing what we'll do for love! Sarah, Andrew and Melanie, it's always lovely when someone points out a particular turn of phrase they've enjoyed...after all we agonize over some of them, don't we? :)

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  8. Daaaannnnnnnnng girl, you knocked it out of the ballpark with this one!! ADORE. This one is awesome for so many reasons. Love, love, love.

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    1. Aw thanks Angela! Just wanted to portray a need and desire so strong and overwhelming that even becoming a zombie was worth it...maybe!

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  9. Powerful tale, a vivid description, felt from inside: a fascinating piece :)

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  10. I felt the passion, it was great.

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  11. Wow! Intense and horrifying. Great job! Would have been a hell of a first date.

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  12. Romance is always a gruesome endeavor, though rarely this externally. Beautifully done.

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  13. Poor girl. At least she realized her dream. Nicely done.

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  14. Gruesome picture... and wonderfully crafted piece full of burning desire...

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    1. Ha ha, the gruesome pic is my daughter...who works with special effects make up! Nice to have a pic to use!

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  15. Lauren and CC, thanks for reading, it would certainly be a strange first date, but one she wanted! Honore and Seanganus, thanks for your appreciation and lovely thoughts.

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  16. I love the way you write, your description is wonderful. There's an award for you on my blog :)
    http://mybafflingbrain.blogspot.co.uk/2012/09/reader-appreciation-award.html

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    1. Thanks Laura, for the compliment and the nomination!

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  17. Lisa! I love this so much; full of true emotion and the internal struggle, but a fairytale worthy ending!!! Awesome :)

    Also, the picture is scary...that's a talented daughter you have.

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    1. This makes me smile Lillie! And Bekah will be very happy you like her zombie prosthetics!

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