Tuesday, 15 January 2013

BCF: Revolution

January Week One prompt:



Written for Business Card Fiction January Prompt 1 Click to visit the other entries!

16 comments:

  1. Oooo... Now this is a good one. I like it. Nice and dark. Like the image itself. (:

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    1. Yup, going for sinister and disturbing with this one!

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  2. Nice, also thought the way you used the font was brilliant, really gave us a proper creepy feeling x

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    1. I liked the fading out idea, just like the poor citizens...oblivious!

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  3. I love it! So much said in so few words. And I really like the way you made the color of the words slowly fade. It goes perfectly with the story.

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    1. I loved the formatting on yours too Christina... it's fun to play around with it!

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  4. Excellent Lisa, both in content and presentation.

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  5. A great story, nice and spare with the words so there's no excess verbiage. I love the way you've presented it too, I was toying with that idea too, but the fading of the text really adds to it, especially with the way the story went

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    1. It's fun to play with the format, thanks for commenting

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  6. A great story. The fading out of your words with the city in the background - a clever idea and adds a touch more to you already atmospheric words.
    One of my favourites.

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  7. Beautiful card design and the use of the font color fading in and out of the background was nearly as "insidious" as the tale itself. :) My mind was running trying to figure out how this world got the way it did and what else lived in its depths. Great work, Lisa.

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    1. He he JM, you caught the spelling mistake! That's something I'm going to have to make sure I fix before I flatten the image next time, but I'm glad you liked the tale and the formatting! :)

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