Monday, 25 February 2013

Five Sentence Fiction: Abandoned


The dinghy rocked, and she didn’t have enough energy to move her legs as they fused to the soft, scorching PVC sides, beneath the baking sun. She tried to prise open her salt-coated mouth to lick her lips, but her tongue stuck to her sandpaper lip and the cry that escaped was little more than a lost whimper.
The glare of the blazing, white fireball in the sky saturated her brain and silence screamed building slowly to a crescendo, until the noise was so loud the roaring filled her entire being.
A shadow passed over her and the little boat pitched wildly.
Fuzzy radio sounds and blips disturbed her delirium, and rough arms grabbed and dragged her, and she was lifted high, high into the sky beneath whirring rotor blades, and the dinghy was left, abandoned, amid the rolling waves.

10 comments:

  1. I was worried reading this. I feared abandoned would be her fate and not the dinghy. Loved the tale.

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  2. Some wonderful descriptions Lisa - glad she was rescued and the dingy abandoned!

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  3. This is fab, as usual. It's good to know she was rescued in the end! :)

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  4. I really enjoyed this. The pictures you paint with your words are so clear. And I'm glad it had a happy ending.

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  5. Excellent! Your imagery is intense. :)

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  6. A happy ending . . phew. . . as always Lisa you use such amazing vocabulary that puts us right there with your character. x

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