Monday, 29 July 2013

Monday Mixer: Cell Mates

My first thought about the words for The Latinum Vault's Monday Mixer were: I'm never going to find use for half of them let alone all nine!
Requirements are to include at least three of Jeff's nine chosen words in a 150 word piece. Including at least one thing, verb and adjective. However...trying something different from my usual prosey pieces, I got them all in, thus qualifying for Overachiever, 'twas fun, but you'll have to tell me if it works!

Photo by Lisa Shambrook (please do not use without permission)

Cell Mates

The Fridge leaned against the bars, obscuring daylight from the cell. Fingers, (yes, that’s how original names were here) rapped his digits on the table behind Errol. Errol, in turn, balanced on his tremulous legs. Fear, dread, anxiety…discomfort, the whole gamut whirled as he moved gingerly across the room. 
Fingers murmured and Errol could barely hear him, “Keep this ‘ere quiet boy…don’t want no bruiting ‘bout this…you hear?” Errol couldn’t hear; his obstreperous heart pounded like the proverbial jackhammer. 
The Fridge held up his finger, staring at the postern jail gate, and Errol paused, his legs spraddled wide. Errol gurned and squeezed his buttocks.
The Fridge’s hand dropped. Fingers glared at the table, at the kludge of bits and pieces, and then stared expectantly at Errol. Errol dropped his trousers and released a pained ululating sound.  
Fingers smiled as a small screwdriver dropped with a clink. “Copacetic Errol, done good!”

(150 Words)




6 comments:

  1. Hahaha! I love it. Surely you have to win with this! I hope there were gloves up someones behind soewhere :)

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  2. Oh man - YUK! But in a very good way. Great use of the words. :)

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  3. You know, I was thinking of another way you could have used "postern" in this story... And I'm guessing Errol is glad they didn't need a claw hammer.

    Anyway -

    You have to win an award for this.
    I'm not sure what it will be.
    I'm not even sure I want to know.
    But you have to win an award.

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  4. Sorry, but I had to add a second comment.

    Your story may contain the single most appropriate use of the word ululating in existence.

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  5. Wow! clever and quite yuk! Great story and fab use of the prompts. xx

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  6. Thanks for all your comments...I had fun with this...maybe too much fun...eeeew!

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