Thursday, 8 August 2013

Five Sentence Fiction: Learning

Photograph (pencil sketch of Cait) by Lisa Shambrook (please do not use)

Tears filled her eyes, unbidden, as she gazed at a pastel portrait of herself. A five or six-year-old child gazed back at her, with wide chocolate-brown eyes and messy, light-brown hair framing delicate childish features. Her mum had pencilled in a halo of daisies threaded through her hair and coloured them with pastels. The innocent beauty on the page entranced her and broke her, it was the first time she’d ever seen herself through the eyes of another. It was more beautiful than any photograph she’d seen, and more delicate than any mirror image she could ever remember.


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12 comments:

  1. The clear simplicity of a child countenance

    What a beautiful, bitter-sweet discovery of our childhood!

    It is difficult to imagine us to have been like that.

    You depict an incredible revelation in this wonderful short tale.

    Od Liam

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    1. Thanks Liam, hopefully a discovery that will give her confidence!

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  2. Greetings Lisa,

    Delighted to make your acquaintance. And thus, the portrait. The wisdom of the inner child is never lost. The innocence tenderly reflected in your words that dance from the screen.

    A peaceful rest of the weekend, Lisa.

    Gary

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    1. Thanks Gary, that's a beautiful compliment!

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  3. This is just beautiful; fluid description full of feeling. The pic is amazing too. xx

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    1. :) It's a pencil sketch of my daughter a few years ago...went well with the piece!

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  4. An interesting way to learn about one's self, and a unique perspective for the story. Very nice!

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    1. Always fascinating to know how you're seen by those around you...usually more positive than you think!

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  5. A wonderful experience for anyone to have. Beauty comes in so many forms these days, we should not overlook what is deemed simplistic these days.

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  6. This is lovely, Lisa, and how true it is that seeing ourselves through another's eyes can give us new insights and perspectives.

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    1. Thanks Kern, we're harder on ourselves than others are!

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